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The two pie charts illustrate which purposes made people visit art museums over a decade period as a proportion of five main and other categories.
Overall, it is obvious that the majority of people visited art museums with the aim of acquiring knowledge in the years 1990 and 2000. Meanwhile, there were consistent changes in the portion of most categories. Then, that of people, who fill their travel plans, sharply decreased.
Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that the share of learning and gaining knowledge accounted for almost half of the total. While, there was an increase in that of people, who attend a special exhibit, so it became the second largest portion in 2000. Moreover, 27% of people visited art museums in order to fill travel schedules the second most in 1990, but they declined 15% point following a decade. In spite of rising 4% point by aim of purchasing products in art museums, it still widened over the 10 years, whereas the portion of other purposes was lowest in 2000, remaining at 3%. (178 words)
항상 감사합니다. 비밀번호는 1234입니다. 저번에 첨삭해주신 point와 주어부분 매우 도움이 되었습니다.