The given table illustrates the four different reasons why adults in
UK participate in participant art events in three different years. (20년 단위의~라는 점을 적어주시는 게 좋습니다.)
Overall, it is clear that more adults visited art events to satisfy their
desires that is to see specific performers or artists the most according to the given data. (기존의 more 가 성립하려면, 비교대상이 같이 문장 내에 있어야했습니다.)
Looking
at the table in more detail, the both percentages of respondents who attended art
events for children and work have increased throughout 20 years. While under
one tenth among researched people attended events for children 20 years ago, the proportion for
that becomes more than twice at the present. The rate of researched adults who
participated art events for work or business was only 6 percent but it has
risen to 11 percent. In contrast, the figures for people who visit events to
celebrate showed an opposite trend with a gradual drop from 27 percent to under 10 percent.
Meanwhile,
the most popular reason for attending art events is to see particular artists
or performer throughout 20 years, although there was a slight decline from 58
percent to 56 percent. (기간 내내 과반수 이상의~라는 표현을 msg 로 넣어주시는 것도 괜찮습니다.)
총평: (7/7/7/6) 7.0
어려운 표는 아니었던만큼 분석에 있어 크게 문제는 없으셨을 겁니다. 잘 써주셨고, 중간에 보이는 자잘한 것들만 조금 신경써주시면 될 것 같아요. 마지막에 적어드린 msg 는 실전에서 기억이 나면 넣으시고, 그렇지 않더라도 6~7점 정도에서는 크게 의미가 없을 거라 참고만 해주세요~수고하셨습니다 :)