There are more new towns nowadays, it is more important to include public parks and sports facilities for individuals to spend their free time. To what extent do you agree or disagree? |
While new cities are constructing With the continuous construction of new cities, the importance of building public parks and sports facilities has been increasing. Some people think that the construction of those infrastructure is not needed, however, I firmly believe that making those public facilities is necessary for many citizens.
First of all, people can be re-energized by visiting public parks. It is because the parks are located in spaces which are a little bit (얘는 어느정도 구어에 가깝기 때문에 가급적이면 사용하지 않는 게 좋긴 합니다.) far from the heart of cities, so people are able to rest more quietly. Moreover, the parks have tracks for jogging or walking and some equipment for working out, and by doing exercise with these installations, people can relieve their stress. Nowadays, these advantages of public parks are giving chances that are to clear citizen's people's heads and refresh people's their thoughts to those citizens who have not taken a break in their house because of the noise between two floors or those who could not jog, walk, or simple exercise due to the lack of facilities. Accordingly, the satisfaction of people's lives is growing up gradually.
On top of that, public sports facilities let people do various kinds of sports in one place. When the government builds the facilities, it always collects citizen's opinions, and this leads to containing from unpopular sports to sports which are preferred the most. In many countries, people who had lived in cities without public sports centers always went to gyms and did only one kind of sports, but after developing the sports centers, they could do many sports such as basketball, tennis, swim and so forth more frequently and freely in one building. As a result, they could maintain their health in different ways and the favor in the city was grown.
In conclusion, I personally believe that preparing new public infrastructure like parks or sports centers plays a crucial role on an individual's life. It is because it can allow people to gain energy thanks to the proper location to rest and some tools for exercising, and to stay healthy by enjoying many sports.
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