Writing task 2
Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
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In many developed countries, it is compulsory for all children to receive an elementary education at least. During this period, children are taught many subjects including language, mathematics and science, for improving their abilities and knowledge. Especially, in terms of foreign language, there is a debate how it can affect to children's education, that is which has positive effects or not.
Some experts argue that if children receive an early education on second language, they can acquire an additional language easier. Actually, for that reason, in some countries, the governments changed their educational policy that children should receive a second language class from primary school. Furthermore, in the countries not using English, some parents send their children to other countries that use English as a first language to improve their language ability.
On the contrary, there are some opposite opinions, regarding early foreign language education. As the children proceed to higher school, they face with more difficulties, such as college entrance exam, major and future selections. Perhaps, the period of primary school is the only time for enjoying childhood with no pressure. Nevertheless, lots of parents tend to press their children to study hard for their desired satisfaction. Moreover, the people who are in the opposite side, said there will be enough time to learn foreign language, if the young do not learn linguistic subjects at primary school >> 스피킹에선 주어 동사를 생략해도 되겠지만 라이팅에선 써주셔야 합니다.
However, with the becoming global environment, a foreign language can be a competitive ability to children's future. If children receive a learning opportunity of a second language earlier, they can have diverse choices for their path and future. In addition, it is >> 축약형 쓰면 안 됩니다 not only personal ability, but it can also be a national competitiveness>> not only ~~ but also ~~ 할 때 ~~ 부분의 구조는 같아야합니다.
To sum up, learning a foreign language has some advantages to children, with disadvantages. However, in my personal opinion, it is more significant to allow a various chances to acquire a second language to children for their future benefits.
Task Achievement - 7
Coherence and Cohesion - 7
Lexical Resource - 6
Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 6
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