▶ Your Answer :
Do
you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to do work by
machine than by hand.
There
are some people who think that people should work by themselves. However, I think
that I stand on direct conflict with those people. This is because, machine not
only save ample of time but also work accurately.
To
begin with, with the advent of outstanding machines, people are able to save
plenty of time because they no longer stay for a long time in an effort to
simple jobs but consuming long time.>> effort to 다음 do가 들어가야하기도 할 것이고 no longer A but B가 not A but B처럼 해석이 되는데 어떤 뜻인지 잘 모르겠습니다 From my personal experience, since I bought
a dish washer, I could see how it is convenient to capitalize>> use utilize 등 보다 명확한 뜻으로 처음 제시될 땐 그렇게 써주세요 machines. It used
to take more than a half of >> an hour to clean dishes after having a family
gathering >> 어떤 뜻인가요?. However, the brilliant machine finishes within 5 minute so that I do
not need to stand on for over long time to finish it. Indeed, the machine
provides extra time to have a relax>> 동사입니다 , 콤마 넣어주세요 연속이나 동시동작으로 , + ing 꼴로 해줄 수 있습니다 having a cup of coffee and tea. This entire process
has shown that the machine diminishes considerably consuming time considerably to
nonproductive work and, furthermore, yields leisure time to be pleased in
comfort.
On
top of that, the machine carries precisely >> 위와 같이 부사는 동사 뒤에서 수식합니다 out ordered work precisely. These days, climbing a pinnacle of the development of science, it is on the rise to conduct perfectly work
perfectly in every single field and especially in the hospital. Most of works in
hospital, doctors deal with, are directly connected to patient’s lives so that
it is required to be considerably careful and does not allow any mistakes. According
to a research by CNN, some hospitals prepared with brand-new machine have
reported that the >> the percentage가 맞습니다 percentage of mortality has outstandingly decreased outstandingly , >> 콤마 넣어주세요 because of sophisticated
medical devices. This is true that the machine conducts properly and, indeed,
obviously, >> 동사와 무관하게 사용됐다면 콤마로 나눠주세요 improves work’s quality.
To
sum up, to spend less time on work and obtain a perfect result of process, it is
a better decision to try a machine. In this regard, I firmly believe that the
machine are placed near people more in comfort in an effort to work rather than in hand.
문법 오류가 많고 이해가 되지 않는 문장들도 있었습니다 잘 봐주시고 꼼꼼하게 살펴봐주시기 바랍니다 machine이 너무 많습니다 machinery 혹은 mechanical equipment 등 다양하게 구사해주세요 Task Achievement - 6 Coherence and Cohesion - 5 Lexical Resource - 5 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 5 5.0예상합니다
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