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IELTS Writing 캠브릿지7권 Test3 Task2 / 14.02.07. / 35분48초
Long time ago, universities had>> had pp는 현재는 진행되지 않는 상황을 일컫습니다 간단하게 과거 동사 혹은 managed to 가 어떨까요? 발전이란 포괄적인 범위 내에서 단지 지식을 논하는 글에는 너무 광범위하단 생각입니다 developed to improve special people’s acknoledge. However, the today’s hard economic reality means that they standstill>> 명사입니다 동사가 올 자리이니 are stuck on은 어떨까요 on that purpose>> 어떤 purpose 일까요?. So >> so and or but also 는 문두에 쓰지 않습니다 Therefore, 라고 해주세요 nowadays, almost>> almost의 품사를 아시면 됩니다 명사의 대부분이라고 한다면 most라고 써주는 것이 좋습니다 universities have the function of both knowledge taker >> providers 가 좋겠네요 and skill-improvement centers.and In my opinion, it cannot helped now, but it just depends on student’s selection.
To the my case in my opinion In my case, I graduated from the Air Force Academy, and majored in aeronautics. It is because>> because 를 바로 문두에 쓰지 않습니다 I thought that the subject could improve the understanding of aircrafts, which is the most important personality of air force officers factor for aviators. Like me, A number of people population has the opportunity to choose their studying, and . Furthermore, if someone majored in studies mechanics, building construction, and the other workplace-related thing, a variety of companies must will welcome the person. As In the middle ages, a person who had studied about God at university was invited by many churches.
In contrast, in my girlfriend's case, she wanted to be an actor or an entertainer, so she chose to major participate >> major가 너무 쓰여서 바꿔봤습니다 in drama act acting at university. After graduation, she had some plays and roles played some roles on the stage, and she had a chance to be a dancer. So she wanted to improve her knowledge about human’s body itself, so she decided to study about that as a postgraduate student. Maybe, that selection gives >> 과거 시제가 더욱 좋을 듯 합니다 an advantages on her knowledge and working abilities for a dancer in a number of ways. Likewise, pure studying, such as philisophy and mathematics, also improves student’s understanding ability and brain. So these upgraded population might make some improvements on society.
In conclusion, the university’s main function is now unlimited. They should provide a variety of options to population, and it depends on just students deciding.
------------------------- population을 사람들의 의미로 쓰신거라면 사용이 잘못됐습니다 또한 문법적인 실수가 많습니다 품사를 정확히 다시 알아보시거나 되새기는 시간을 가져보시며 수일치에 주의해주세요 또한 문장들이 대체로 많이 깁니다 한 줄~ 한 줄하고 3분의 1 정도의 길이로 작성해주세요 또한 내용은 오프토픽이라고 말씀드릴 수 있겠습니다 테스크가 요구하는건 대학이 고용주들에게 있어서 유용한 정보를 제공해야하느냐 아니면 그냥 상관없이 지식만 전달하면 되느냐에 대한 테스크입니다 Task Achievement - 5 Coherence and Cohesion - 6 Lexical Resource - 5 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 5
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