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The chart compares information how old
people got married in a special country in 1996 and 2008. (남녀가 구분된다는 점을 적어주세요!) (여기서 한 칸 더 띄어주셔야 합니다.)
Overall, it is clear that females aged
25-29 got married the most in both 1996 and 2008, while the popular marriage age for males was the group of 25-34 in 1996 and ~~~ (일단 문법을 수정해드리긴 했는데, 뭐가 제일 높았다~는 기본적으로는 세부적인 분석을 할 때, 즉 밑의 문단들에 넣어주시면 됩니다. 대신 여기에서는 남녀 간의 비교, 즉 '여성이 남성보다 더 빨리 결혼하는 경향을 두 연도 모두에 볼 수 있었다.' 를 적어주시면 되고요.) marrige age
group of males was 25-34 age group in 1996 and 30-34 age group in 2008. Also,
we can see that the popular marriage age group was delayed during the 12-year
period in both men and women. (이 문장 좋습니다.)
With regard to females, 25-29 year-old
females got married the most In in 1996, with the proportion accounting for just under
12%. And (문장을 and but so 로 시작해서는 안 됩니다.) this figure remained unchanged in 2006. The second popular marriage age
group of female was the ages between 30 and 34 in 1996, at around 7%. However, this percentage increased by 8% (percentage point 로 적어주셔야 합니다. 여기에 대해서는 링크를 하나 넣어드릴게요.) in 2006.
With regard to males (바로 위에 똑같은 표현이 있으니까 여기는 웬만하면 대체하는 게 좋습니다.), the proportion of
25-29 year olds and 30-34 year olds was equally highest in 1996 at 9%, while
the proportion (proportion 의 경우도 of 30-34 year-old males was highest in 2006 at 11%.
12.29일 실제 시험 기출문제입니다. 시험장에서 적었던 기억으로 다시 작성해봤습니다. 새해 복 많이 받으세요~
cheiron 님도 새해 복 많이 받으세요 :) |