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It is clear that there is an increasing controversial issue regarding whether that it is important to share a lot of information in a variety of fields. Although there is an advantage as a further development, I think that it is outweighed by the drawbacks. Some people argue that sharing resources can be means of the development. One of the reasons is because offering materials each other in various areas like science, education. (여기는 일단 불완전한 문장, 즉 비문인데, 의도하신 바에 대해 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.) For example, scientists have to share the latest discoveries with others even if the experiments fail in order to reduce the amount of the trails and errors. In addition, by communicating with different groups of educators, teachers are able to provide an improved quality of education to students. (채점관은 이 문장을 읽고 how? 라는 의문을 가지게 됩니다. 이에 대해 짧게나마 적어주세요.) Therefore, teachers need to share materials due to students' performances. However, there are also several disadvantages of the issue. First of all, the main disadvantage (대체해주세요!) is that the crimes are likely to be happened. Some criminals hack the online servers and personal accounts, thus, it is required to enact and enforce the policy of regulations. Moreover, it is fact that the amount of information is competitive (경쟁력의 의미로 작성해주셨나요?) in the era of the digital. Especially, businesses would be featureless if the share too much ideas with each other. For example, all corporations would have similar traits and make a loss if companies share information with competitors. In conclusion, for reasons mentioned above, someone insist that there are positives about sharing information as much as possible such as the further developments, but I believe that it is crucial to limit the amount of resources (양 자체를 제한하는 것이 아니라, 공유되는 양을 제한하는 것입니다.) because of the increasing crime rates and the enterprises' competition. |