Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Most of the individuals frequently face an inevitable and terrible situation in their lives. Regarding this issue, it is increasingly difficult to ignore the fact that there are two ways that people can choose choice; accept or overcome. On the one hand, it can be said that there are a range of benefits when they just conform to an unavoidable situation. On the other hand, it can also be said that the drawbacks of that should not be ignored. (지금 이거랑, 논제의 try and improve such situations 는 전혀 다릅니다. 수험생들이 흔히 범하는 오류이므로 주의해주세요~) Personally, I believe that people should try to change their own situation.
There are those with a belief that there are a variety of challenging circumstances that people can never overcome. For example, a lot of African babies are born in poverty and with serious illness that they would not want to select if they could. Likewise, human beings cannot choose where they will be born and their parents. Such being the case, it is more wise to accept and adapt to their environment. Another reason why they believe this contention is that there are no is no such thing as a perfect satisfaction in the world. There was a famous story that the most rich richest man in the world, Mr. Bill (여기에서 빌 게이츠를 의도하신 거면, 그걸 정확히 넣어주시는 게 좋긴 합니다.) say that ‘If I had more amount of money, I would be happier’.
From the other standpoint, others are not content with the aforementioned argument. Primarily, it is no exaggeration to say that people can change anything if they want to; ‘Nothing is impossible’ because nothing is impossible. For instance, Helen Keller was is the physically handicapped who overcame overcomes her inherent disabilities. She was born blind and deaf. (이런 걸로 감점이 되는 건 절대 아니긴 한데, 헬렌 켈러는 처음부터 그랬던 게 아니라 1~2살 가량에 시각 등을 잃은 거라, 정확하게 명시해주시면 더 좋긴 합니다.) However, she tried not only to switch these disabilities but also to become became a honor student in her university. The most compelling evidence of this opinion is that anyone can see that an ordinary person can be a world leader by doing their strenuous efforts.
Without going in circles, I am inclined to be of the same opinion that people must do their best to change their environment considering their situation a little bit.
총평: (6/7/6/6) 6.5
이전 글과 마찬가지로 템플릿과 그렇지 않은 부분 간의 차이를 메꾸는 것이 우선이 되겠습니다. 6.5점 이상이 무조건 필요한 상황이면 꼭 문법에 대한 보강은 별도로 해주세요! (저는 지금 6.5점을 드렸지만, task1에서 오는 감점+암기에 따른 감점을 고려하면 아직은 실전에서 6.0을 받을 확률이 훨씬 높습니다.)
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