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People have different opinions whether or not zoos should be banned. Although some people >> some만 쓰지 말아주세요 assert that keeping animals in cages is cruel, I strongly believe that zoos could bring many positive influences on our society and animals too as well >> as well이 더 좋을 듯 싶어 썼습니다. This essay will outline the advantages and disadvantages of this issue
To begin with, wild creatures’ innate characteristics would be negatively >> 부사는 동사 앞에 써주는 것이 좋습니다 affected negatively. For example, they might forget how to find habitats and hunt their prey. A lion or cheetah’s natural instinct is to kill and hunt weak animals by strangulation. Unfortunately, the predatory mammals will lose natural characteristics as zookeepers >> 한 단어입니다 provide them with enough food and comfortable living places. Moreover, many animal lovers are fiercely against keeping animals in zoos because animal dignity and the rights are invaded severely by human beings. They insist people should let all living beings have the right to live in the nature freely as humans do.
On the other hand, zoos would contribute to educate people. It is true that people can be exposed to diverse learning through books and the Internet. However, visiting to zoos would lead the public to gain direct and in depth >> 가운데 -빼주세요 knowledge. Besides, children should be taught that living creatures on the Earth are very important and valuable. Furthermore, artificial habitats seem a last shelter for endangered animals like>> such as 아카데믹에선 like보단 such as 가 훨씬 좋습니다 pandas and elephants. This is because, even if the police force cracks down on smuggling animals and poaching, illegal hunting is still prevailing worldwide. In addition, various species in zoos can attract vast number of tourists. Thus, it can help a country invigorate its economy.
In conclusion, despite the significance of keeping animals’ instinct and dignity, I still think zoos should keep animals to provide education. Also 문두에 also는 쓰지 않습니다 we should build more zoos to protect endangered species from extinction.(293 words)
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