▶ Your Answer : As technology is developed, there are a lot of methods of communicating with other people. It has brought convenience to modern people, and people do not need to worry about conveying important information to a person who lives far away from their hometowns. However, everything has pros and cons.
Individuals can contact others easily by using mobiles phones, emails or social network services and so on. They are becoming cheaper and free, and so many people utilize them for their work or greetings. The devices for communication are very convenient for normal people, especially who live apart from their places. When they make a call to acquaintances, they can feel as if they were at home near them.
However, there are many negative things in using high-tech technology. Users of social network services such as facebook or twitter often upload their private photos on the Internet. It can give a sense of closeness to friends who are not close to the users, but it often shows only positive sides of them in the virtual world. People usually live with a mask wearing, but people who only see webpages can be made to have a bias and preconception. It sometimes causes people to cut down their relationships, as they realize that one person who is in the real world is different to another one who is on the Internet. In addition, youths, who tend to prefer to text messages instead of calling, and some young people sometimes lose how to converse with others. It has become a kind of a social problem, since it is much easier than meeting people to say hello personally. Lots of people rely on the devices too much nowadays, and some people are addict to smart phones.
In conclusion, individuals' lives are increasingly becoming comfortale owing to the development of technology. However, people should not be governed by the devices. They do not have to use them to show off >> 그런 기기를 사용하는게 본인을 과시하는 것일까요? their fake lives, and they ought to use them under their own controls properly.
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