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The three diagrams shed light on (맞지 않는 표현 illustrate) the overall layout of West Park Secondly School which was built in 1950 and progressed changes to be completed in 1980 and 2010.
At the period of 1980, the houses were all demolished and school expanded the space with science block, and plus they accommodated a car park, which was placed beside a science building. The vacancy ??? which is farmland had been replaced with sports filed for children. However, playground remained without not any changed.
After 30 years later, the school conducted to broaden the garage, occupying the place for sports. As for sports ground, it was installed again in the playground at about a third of it. When it comes to a science black ? block?, there was no special alteration until 2010 as well as a main building.
By analyzing the data, we can conclude that the school attempted to extend their building with a new block and provide a car park with much bigger size to serve convenient facilities by attracting many parents and students.
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