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As the tourism business is become expanding, people who are the number of people who are traveling the foreign countriesy hasve increased in for several decades. For this process, some insist that travellers should obey the local culture where they are visiting. So In this essay, I will give the two opposite views whether they must follow the regulation for their travel destination and my own opinion.
On the other one hand, tourists who are traveling in a foreign country have to follow the local cultures, such as their behavior, and customs for comprehension of their local people's life. Bbecause foreigners generally should adapt to the culture of the country which they are traveling now for their convenient trip. It also makes them to have a precious memory so memorable that they cannot forgetable for their life until they are deadth. That is,it is essential for tourists to respect the local customs and cultures during they are visiting the nation tour.
Nevertheless, local goverments which host tourisms for to earn a money from the foreign tourists have to understand comprehensive them (them? 누구?) because they do not cannot be know about the regulations of the tourists. For example, when some local governments impose a fine to from the tourist thoughtlessly, it could causes the dissatisfaction by foreign tourists because of the savage attitudes of the travel destinations. As a result, theseis causes have a negative effects of on their tourist industry, for decreasinge the number of foreign tourists. In this regard, a local govenment also hasve to comprehend foreign tourists for their ignorancde of their (their 누구? 대명사 사용 주의!!!) cultures as well.
To sum up, because of the cultural differences, some foreign visitors have a difficulty to travel a foreign country. However, as they know about their aspect of their situation, it can haves an effect to avoid the misunderstand from their diffenence. Therefore, I think the local government should respect a foreing (스펠링!) traveler prior to before they 누구? follow the regulations.
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