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The advent of the information technology, the iInternet (주어 설정 주의.. 인터넷이 증가했다??? 사람들의 인터넷 사용이 증가??? 혹은 인터넷이 발달했다?) has been increased for several decades. However, some think that it is has a convenient to make a conversation among the people, while others argue that it will be destroys the relationship as due to lonsing the face-to-face ways of communication. Although Despite this problem,in my opinion, the iInternet has some benefits conveniences for making a social relationships.
First of all, using the iInternet to make a conversation has a benefits to deliver a information effectively. Recently, because people generally want to the fastest way for delivering their news, they have invented some of the communicational files in online conversation, such as Kakaotalk, Nate-on, and Telegram (아이엘츠를 채점하는 사람들은 외국인들이기 때문에 세계적으로 유명한 것으로 예를 들어주세요 e.g. Facebook..) . Therefore, these programs make a are convenientce to know the family's news as it can deliver the information whenever they want to be. In this regard, conversing on the iInternet has an advantageous in terms of connection where they are located on.
On top of that, the online chating has a capability to make a foreign friends. For example, people who are conneting the Facebook have an opportunity to make a variety of friends whenever they want. In addition, they can express their opinion or emotion when they look special events or pictures which exhibited by someone. It also may also be a process to make a familiar relationship for others. So, I think that the iInternet is beneficial to make a friends conveniently.
As a result, it is sure that the iInternet will be a social customs in the future. Therefore, people tend to make a online friends recently, and they always make a conversation only a online. So, I agree with the convenience of the iInternet to make a conversation.
SCORE: 4.5-5
Comment: 문법의 실수가 많습니다. 또한, 단어를 선택할 때 이 단어가 명사인지 형용사인지 동사인지 잘 구분하시면서 공부하시고 사용하셔야겠습니다. 단/복수와 관사의 사용도 안되고 있습니다. |