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Because people recently tend to travel for to relax their minds, tourism also has developed according to the requirement demand of the tourists. Neverthelss, someone is concerned about the problem of the development of tourism. So, I will give the both sides of the tourism.
At the positive side of the views, expanding the tourist industry has several benefits. First of all, it can inspires for people to experience a new opportunity. During they travel in the leisure time, people (주어 어디!??) can recharge their battery as they relax on the resort. In addition, for process of the tour, children can learned abourt the history and culture of the nation they are visiting belong to the local characteristics. Especially, elementary school students sometimes go to the travel in school for acqiring the knowledge related to their social subject. It is clear that tourist industry has a advantageous effects both learning and relaxing.
However, it requires the suitable environment and time for travelers. For example, when someone visits the place destination in cold climate, they could be remind have the bad memony abour their travel. And then, In addition, people generally have a chance to travel when they have a long holiday, it also affected the revenue of the tourist industry. If these requisites are do not correspond to the visitor's requirement, tourism can be collapsed quickly. For instance, Greece was one of the most developed tourist countriesy, but as the country started to decrease the tourists to visit the Greecse, they happened experienced the economical crisis. In this regard, tourism has many requirements both visitor and local budget.
In conclusion, travel can make people to get out rid of their stress for have a relaxing time. Also, for children, they can learned about the knowledge of their educaiton. So, development of tourism has a benefit to make people for their rest and education.
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