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The line graph gives information on the amount number (동물의 '양'이 아니라 '수' 입니다) of two kinds of mammals with fur which are native and introduced at the Carnarvon National Park in Australia between 1930 and 2000.
The most notable feature of the data is that the largest amount had shown at native mammals in 1930 whereas the least amount was taken by introduced mammals at the same period and each value was 12 hectare and less than 3 respectively. However, as time goes went (년도가 이미 과거의 일, 동사 주의!) by, each position of line had shown completely reversed situation in 2000.
To be more specific, when it comes to introduced mammals, it was hardly seen shown at first in the park. In 1950, (comma) however, the amount number of animals stated to soareding, peaking at about 11 in the middle of 1970 and continuously growing grew by 1990s. As for the native, from 1930 to 1950 they were the main animals in the park. Not long age, in 1950, it the figure had fallen drastically until 2000, showing minimal fluctuation during the period.
By analyzing the data, we can conclude that in the park, the number of introduced mammals was increasingly skyrocketed for 70 years and the reverse was true ?? for the native mammals.
SCORE: 5
Comment: the number of/ a number of/ the amount of와 같은 표현들을 어디에 사용해야하는지 잘 익혀주시고, IELTS WRITING Task 1에서 중요한 동사의 시제 설정에도 주의해주세요. |