Many people hope to become a member of conglomerate or good business, thus they do put much effort to get various skills. Some people believe that among the skills, the skill one must possess, the most fundamental and important skill is a great job ability . However, I think that interpersonal skill is more important in recruiting a new employee.
There are many reasons why people believe job skills is are very important. If someone has a good job skill, he could be efficient. Also, those who have good job skills need less time to learn the task, so they can contribute to the improvement of the company. What is more they can help other employees to finish their (주어의 they와 같은 사람인가요..? 대명사 사용 주의!!!)work. With this, job skill is really an important requirement to hire an employee.
However, in my opinion, interpersonal skill is more important because when we work at a company, we are not alone. In other words, we must work with colleagues and maintain smooth relationships with them, it is a part of working. If you work continuously, job skill will increase, but interpersonal skills are will not, because this is an innate ability to individuals. Therefore, is if someone has good social skills, he could deal well with others well in the workplace and contribute to the company’s success.
In conclusion, interpersonal skill is more important, because it is hard to change the characteristics of individuals. Therefore, employers should consider the interpersonal skills when they hire applicant.
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