▶ Your Answer : The bar chart compares the number of people who moved to other countries from Britain over a three 3 year period from 2004 to 2007.
It is evident that Australia and Spain were the countries to which the majority of the British moved to, whereas the numbers of people who would prefer to immigrate to New Zealand, the USA and France were much lower relatively. In addition, people seemed to move most in 2004 and 2005.
In 2004, over 40 thousand people emigrated to Australia, which is the highest number of the five 5 countries, however a similar number of emigrants who went to New Zealand, the USA and France is at just over 20 thousand. By 2006, emigrants to Australia increased considerably to over 50,000, which is the highest over the period.
The figure in Australia was still the highest in 2007, while France had the lowest popularity as a emigrative country to emigrate to. Among the least three 3 countries of with the least emigrants, France accepted over 30 thousand of British people as immigrants.
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