Your Answer ▼ The influence of developed technology on tendency of people's relationships is the most controversial argument among modern people. In this essay, two different perspectives on this issue will be discussed. (내 의견도 같이 언급될 것임을 적어주셔야 합니다.)
On one hand, it is certain that improvement of technology, such as cellphones or internet, allowed people to connect with each other regardless of time or distance. In the past, contact methods were considerably restricted in many different aspects. By contract, after the high-tech has been advanced, it is much convenient for modern people to share each other's daily life without distinction of locations or time in conjunction with to have even more intimate relations among peers. (여기는 대략의 의도하신 의미는 알겠는데 문장이 약간 꼬인 것 같네요. 제가 의미를 정확히 파악하지 못했을 수도 있으니 댓글 주시면 확인하고 필요할 경우 수정해드리겠습니다.) For instance, it was quite limited for myself to contact to one of my friends when I was a juvenile since the most of households occupied only a single telephone for the entire family members. However, the development of personal mobiles enables people to interact with each other in a swifter and more convenient way.
On the other hand, some assert that although the technology made people have more intimate relationships in account of frequent contacts, those are all superficial intimacy. Undoubtedly, cellphones and the Internet technology have greatly changed people's daily lives ever since those were introduced. Yet, those, also, (여기는 쉼표가 세 개나 있을 필요가 없습니다. 많아도 한 개면 충분해요. 과한/불필요한 쉼표의 사용은 글을 읽어나가는 흐름을 끊어버리므로 자제해주세요.) played a negative role in weakened emotional bonds of people, which used to be strong. To illustrate, it is easily found that a great number of people are less concerned with socialization in real life, but socialization in social medias. Furthermore, modern citizens are unlikely to prefer to interact with others in actual daily life, which is regarded as a severe social issue of the contemporary generation. (여기의 두 문장은 결과적으로는 하고자 하는 말이 거의 같으므로, 둘 중 하나만 골라서 이에 대해 더 구체적으로 파고 들어가는 식으로 서술해주세요!)
To sum up, although it is true that the development of technology has brought modern population tremendous benefit, the technology has exerted some pessimistic effect on people as well. That is, more isolated social atmosphere. In this regard, I firmly believe that modern technology has caused less sociable interaction among people.
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