To correct children, punishment is required and effective, and learning this as young as possible is important. I partly agree with some conditions and this essay will discuss the reason why punishment is needed, and what punishment would audults use for children’s behaviour.
Recently, banning the physical punishment in public education organization became a huge issue. A number of parents suggest teacher to tell children directly what they acted wrong, not beat them like an animal. This arguement started when the scene of beating children in kindergarten floated on the surface and spread to social media. This made society as an untouchable world, hence, many rules and laws caused by that have maden to protect children from violence. Even tough this is only a small part of education system, however abusing the power of being adult is not acceptable in any alternative ways.
In Korea, Parents tend to be more careful to punish their children. Children are growing without physical touching, and it means they do not afraid of adults in general. It is a huge drawback of the following trend. I think parents should teach with punishment when their children had a certain faults, and allow to teacher a minimum punishment to students in public space. Adults have a responsibility to lead youngster the right way. As those laws, children in these days make more trouble in education environment and make worse constantly.
In conclusion, punishment in reasonable situation is obviously required, however, to prevent more possible situation that young student could be a victom of power abusing is proper. Parents should teach them to respect adults enough, and it is not only parents’ share, also teacher.
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