▶ Your Answer :The chart shows which categories people spend their time the most by genders. >> 서론 본론 결론의 형태가 필요합니다 문단 나눠주시길 바랍니다
As clearly seen from the pie chart, most men allocated their time to watch sports broadcasting programs that >> which를 쓰신다면 주어나 목적어 중 하나가 빠져야하는데 완전한 절이 와서 that으로 바꿔드렸습니다 figures were about 32.5 percentage. In contrast, the viewers did not prefer to watch documentaries and dramas programs, with the figures accounting for 4.4 percentage and 7.4 percentage respectively. When it comes to female viewers, the dramas>> 본문에 drama라고 명시되어있나요? soap opera 혹은 series 혹은 the latter 등으로 표현하실 수 있을 듯 싶습니다 were the most popular type of programs. On the other hand, like such as men, documentaries were a less popular type of programs to them, accounting for >> 이미 앞에 썼으니 같은 뜻인 taking up 이 좋을 듯 싶네요 3.2 %. It is also interesting to note that entertainment programs and news programs took up amounted to the similar figures between men and women, which were approximately 18% and 35% respectively. >> 역시 결론이기에 나눴습니다
Overall, it is apparent that women viewers prefer to watch on dramas the most. By contrast, men televiewers such as watching tend to watch sports broadcasting the most. Documentary programs are less popular among the TV viewer audiences.
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Task Achievement - 7
Coherence and Cohesion - 6
Lexical Resource - 6
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