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[intro 1 ] : the line graph and the table compare the consumption of water in therms of three different sectors and countries.
[intro 2] : The line graph gives information on the usage of global water by sectors from1900 to 2000 and the table shows the water expenditure by countries in 2000.
As clealy seen from the first line graph, it was interesting to note that agricultural indusrty accounted for tby far the most water consumtion among two industries, which was approximately 2,800Km3[어떻게 쓰는지 몰라서 이렇게 씁니다 ..;]in 2002. This figure gradually increased gradually during the whole period. On the other hand, water was not used in domestic industry as mush as agriculture indusrty, with the figure accounting for about 5,00km3 in 2000. it is also interestiong to note that from 1900 to 1950 the use of grobal water in industrial and domestic industries did not increase as much as that of agriculture. The figures have remained stable at 30% by 1950.
when it comes to country, in 2000, Brazil citizens used the water at about 159m3 per person. However,Congo citizens' the consumption of water was 8m3. In contrast, the large amount of water is used in a agriculture industry. However, for countries, the greate amount of water is consumed by Brazil citizens rather than Congo people.
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