▶ Your Answer :The chart illustrates causes of less profits in agriculture and the table gives information on how the causes above had an impact on three continents during the 1990s.
There was too much destruction of forests. 30% of deforestration affected Europe by 9.8% of a decrease, and it declined 1.7% of Oceanian forests. North America recieved a damage>> was damaged 가 좋습니다 of about only 0.2%. People in the world cultivated 28% of entire earth, which was over figure of what global people need. It gave 7.7% of over cultivation >>가운데 - 빼주세요 in Europe, and 3.3% in North America. However, there was no affection to Oceania at all. The most serious problem was raising livestocks. 35% over-grazing in terrestrial extent damaged 11.3% in Oceania, 5.5% in European countries and 1.5% in North America. Other causes of land degradation in worldwide was 7%.
Overall, the continent which had the most degraded land was Europe, at 23%, and the next one was it is followed by Oceania and the last one was North America in order.
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