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In our rapidly-changing society, it is not surprising news associated with the old people. Many people think of old people as a big burden for the young generation. However, old people like such as our grandparents play an important role which conveying right value to the young people in this modern society. Therefore, it is a right decision for old people to live together with young people.
The first reason why they live with young people is that To begin with, the old are able to teach young people the importance of discovering the real meaning of the life. A lot of young people are susceptible to their surroundings and cannot keep on the right direction in their life. It sometimes leads to them lose who they are>>??, and even them jump into bad situations such as crimes or deceptions>>??. Especially, young children who are subjective to the all kinds of temptations might be out of control, but old person aged people who have are insightful of life experiences encourage them>>?? to learn social norms and standards. The young children under the old people's instruction might become well-rounded and balanced citizens.>> 이게 삶의 진짜 의미를 찾는 것의 중요성을 가르치는건가요??
Secondly, old citizens encourage young people to find their talents and potentials. Most of today’s young generation today are brainwashed to pursue only money-oriented goals. As a consequence, they are not able to judge the real meaning of success. Many young students who do not have a concept of their career in the whole life want to become a lawyer or a doctor even though they have potential or are interested in music or sports. With being helped or advised by the old generations, they could climb to the top of their career ladder because the old have a lot of information and insight.
As seen from the two supports presented above, I cannot finish my argument without saying that old people is not a problem which the young generation have to solve, but, rather, they are valuable teachers for the young people generation.
young, old 한 사람들을 가리킬 때 어휘는 약해 보이긴합니다
서론에만 old people 이 네 번 들어갔네요
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