Some people think that theoretical knowledge should be given priority in education while others suggest that more practical skills should be taught. Which side are you with? Give your opinion and reasons based on your own experiences.
Some people strongly insist that students should learn practical skills more than theoretical knowledge in university>> 쓰신 것처럼 university가 원래 있는 걸로 아는 task 입니다 하지만 위에 문제에 이 내용 빼시면 전 테스크에 없는 내용이라 생각하고 감점할 수 있습니다 문제에 제대로 적어주시면 고맙겠습니다 . Personally, I completely agree with this view for some reasons. >> 원래 좋은 라이팅이라면 some reasons 가 아닌 어떤 큰 범위를 정해준 후 본론 1, 2 에서 그 범위 내에 있는 주장들을 씁니다
First of all, practical skills can help students to find easily their jobs more easily. This is mainly because most employers will prefer employees who have already learned the skills needed in the workplace. Take an example as a marketing company. For example, in the case of a marketing company, it will need the graduates who can know how to sell products and manage well their customers, >> 반면에라는 뜻의 while 앞엔 콤마가 붙습니다 while the those with only theoretical knowledge with marketing subject cannot >> 한 단어입니다 be attracted by the company. >> 읽다가 계속 길어져서 무슨 말인지 모르게 됩니다 긴 문장은 원어민들이 정말 싫어하고 이해하지도 이해하려 하지도 않습니다 Additionally, all firms are able to save time and money for the new employees because they do not have to spend much time for them to be trained. Therefore, trained with practical skills through college can be preferred by a large number of companies. >> additionally 는 다른 주장을 나타내는 말입니다 한 본문엔 하나의 주장만 써주세요
In addition, students can have a chance what that they are good at through education of practical skills, which is the most important thing after getting a job because working a talent for>>?? can bring confidence and happiness to them confidence and happiness, although the ones those with only theoretical knowledge is truly hard for them to detect look for their aptitudes. >> 4줄이 한 문장인건 정말 문장 구성에 최악이라고 볼 정도로 안 좋습니다 Consequently, students experienced skills practically can enjoy satisfied their lives with confidence.
In conclusion, especially after graduation, they can find>> find what ? and work in where it is related to their aptitudes and, eventually, employers will choose them.
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