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■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? | |
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Most people in the whole world among who go to school learn foreign language as a second one. As a result, some people argue that studying foreign language in primary school has more benefits than studying in secondary school. I believe more that people should learn a foreign language since they are in the former institution.
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On the one hand>>on one hand 혹은 on the other hand 입니다, some people insist that studying their own language should be first. It is directly related to how people understand and learn other languages well. For instance, in my case, I focused on studying English since I was 5 years old, not focusing on my own language. As a result, I have >> 축약형 쓰지 말아주세요 missed both two of languages, which means, I cannot >> 축약형 쓰지 말아주세요 speak English as well as Korean>> 제대로 구사하지 못한다, 완벽히 구사하지 못한다 식으로 작성해주셔야 합니다 쓰신 대로 해석하자면 영어 한국어 둘 다 아예 못하는 걸로 보입니다. How could I understand what it means and what they say while I cannot >> 축약 스지 말아주세요 comprehend in Korean first, either?. Consequently, people should be properly taught their own languages properly first in primary school.
However, from my perspective, people should learn other languages since they are primary school students than secondary school students. That is due to the fact that studying, especially for language as soon as possible brings unbelievable effects. Some researches have proved that the gap of acquiring from learning language between primary school students and secondary school ones was quite wide. Besides, I, for example, got received a great English score in secondary school rather than my friends who studied English first in secondary school, and still I am able to learn English much easier than they are.
In conclusion, studying foreign language in school is essential, and it should be started in primary school than secondary school or as soon as possible. But However, we should not lose our own language which is very basic of whenever learning other languages.
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정확한 뜻이 잘 전달되지 않고 수식이 중간중간 너무 많아 부드럽게 글이 연결되지 않는다는 단점이 있습니다
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Task Achievement - 6
Coherence and Cohesion - 6
Lexical Resource - 5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 5
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