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No one can deny the fact that tuition fee in university >> 모든 대학들의 수업료는 비싸다는 것을 나타내려면 단수를 써야 합니다 is expensive. There are some factors contributing to this argument,>> 콤마 빼주세요 and I am going to describe them in this short written discussion below.
Firstly, from the financial standpoint, the young generation students should not have to bear the huge amount of debt to finish their study in colleages or universities.>> 어린 아이들은 대학에서 공부를 마치기 위해 많은 양의 빚을 견디지 말아야 한다 ?? 말이 이상하네요 students only have to focus on their study in college or university without concerning about any financial burden >> 이런 식으로 주장으로 나와야 합니다. It is broadly accepted that students are under pressure of the tuition fee, not under that of academic assignments. This means that many pupils feel burdensome paing the espensive tuition fee.In fact, in some countries such as Canada and the USA, almost all students cannot focus on their studying because of earning money to prepare for their tuition cost. In short , students should be relieved from financial stress to concentrate on their study. >> 미국이나 캐나다 사람들은 학비에 부담을 별로 느끼진 않습니다 자국민들한텐 학비를 덜 받고 international students 들에게 약 4~5 배씩 받아가죠 예를 international students 로 드는게 더 좋습니다
As far as the social aspect is concerned>>?? what aspect? >> 뒤에 콤마 빼주세요, with cheap tuition cost, students can receive fair education opportunities regardless of financial barriers. A lot of students, who are eager to study in high standard universities, and intelligent, forgive>>?? give up their own study due to expensive tuition fee. In Yeonse private university of Korea, the tuition fee is about $10,000 per year. Koreans say that young generation in a wealthy family go to this kind of university. To sum up, when the tuition fee is cheap in any universities,>> 콤마입니다 nearly all students can have a chance to study in universities where they want to study.
To put it simply >> In conclusion, for students, every university's tuition fee should be decreased to let young people focus on their study through giving them fair opportunities by reducing financial burden.
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