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Dear Mr Smiths,
I am writing this letter with regard to an English tutoring for Paul who is your new student in the kindergarten >> 한 단어입니다 >> 아이가 유치원에 다니고 있다는 얘기가 없네요.
As you know, Paul has just emigrated from South Korea, so his father asked me to teach English for Paul from time to time to make him to be familiar with a new language and culture so that his son could make new friends and catch up with your lessons as well.>> 문장이 깁니다 적절히 끊어주시면 더 좋겠네요 To do tutoring, I need to borrow some books and materials from you. I may need to use some storybooks to teach him because it has many pictures and easy expressions to learn English, so that he would get >> get동사는 피해주세요 be interested in learning a new language.>> 간단히 맡았단 얘기와 함께 어떤 책이 필요하다 정도로 2~3 문장으로 작성하면 충분할 듯 싶습니다
문화를 배우고 싶다 이런 얘기는 왜 가르치는가? 에 대한 답이라고 생각합니다
I will teach him on every Tuesday and Thursday nights if there is no any time crash with you in his house since I am living nearby his house our schedules are not overlapped since I am living near his house.
You may also catch his personality which is timid, so he cannot get along with new people. The little boy is an introvert, so his father, John, said his son sometimes crys after school as he was not able to understand and communicate with other friends and you. >> 문두에 바로 because를 쓰진 않습니다 It is because of this>> because of this 라면 due to this 가 더 낫겠네요, he seems to get stressed be under stress a lot in the school. Thus, John and I want to make him approach feel familiar with English fast, so that he can enjoy his new life in Australia.>> 문장이 전체적으로 길게 작성이 됩니다 길게 작성되는 문장은 좋지 않습니다
I await prompt response from you am looking forward to receiving your reply..
Yours faithfully,
Jimmy Ha
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