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In modern society, the Internet has been believed as a major source to get abundant information by many people. Some people insist that the information get from the Internet is not accurate. Personally, I also think that all this information is hard to believe since anyone can access to the Internet and there is no monitor who checks the accuracy.
First of all, it is true that we can directly earn various sources of information what we want through the Internet. Likewise anybody can access to the Internet and upload their own information sources without monitoring system. This can be have potential drawbacks, giving a lot of false information to the people. For instance, when we get sick, (comma) we are usually using the Internet to search for the symptoms and the information about the diseases, (comma) related to one’s sickness. However, they would find information written from someone who does not have professional knowledge about that disease. Thus, they could treat their sickness as in a wrong way which makes their condition more worse. As a result, as anyone who is not professional can upload wrong information, (comma) it can make cause harmful situation for someone’s health.
In addition, because there is no one who monitors this inaccuracy, we cannot certain ? about any information from the Internet. To be specific, the Internet is too broad to can be able to check every information. For example, there are tons of websites in on the Internet and in on the website. tThere are also countless categories which contain numerous information sources. Therefore, it cannot have someone who organizes all of these sites, and it is unavoidable (inevitable) to face with a lot of false information.
To sum up, after the advance of the Internet, we can get useful information through the Internet. However, despite these beneficial impacts on for our convenient life, I think that there are much more inaccurate information due to the lack of monitor and accesses of many people who upload unprofessional knowledge.
SCORE: 5.5-6
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