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The tourism industry plays an important role on a nation’s economy. As
a result, many developing countries try to develop their tourism industries
recently. I believe that the development of tourism has a both a positive and negative
effect to developing countries.
Firstly,
tourism industry is a good method to boost the entire economy. By constructing
tourism facilities and infrastructures which are compulsory elements in tourism,
developing countries enable to increase the rates of employment. In addition,
the rise of employment rates leads to the growth of income. (사실 엄밀히 따지면 여기서 문단을 한 번 끊어주셔야 합니다. 장점을 새로운 문단으로 만들거나, 밑의 단점과 하나로 합쳐주셔야 해요. 즉 서론-원인-장점-단점-결론/서론-원인-장단점-결론 의 구조 중 하나를 골라주시면 되는데, 지금과 같이 원인과 장점을 단순히 길이 때문에 하나의 문단으로 만드는 것은 좋지 않습니다. CC의 채점 기준 중 '각 문단이 적절한 기준 아래 나뉘었고 핵심 문장이 있는가' 를 보는 내용이 있는데, 이에 비추어봤을 때 현재의 문단은 역할이 되게 애매하죠.) Meanwhile, bolstering
of tourism industry could be a chance to experience different cultures and lifestyles.
Travelers from various countries might share their cultures with traditional
cultures in developing countries therefore, citizens of developing countries
indirectly experience foreign lifestyles even they have been felt before.
However,
excessive development of tourism has a negative influence on the a local community.
One of the disadvantages is the destroy destruction of the environment. As foreign capital and
the government build tourism facilities, such as hotels or attractions, natural
areas have a high possibility of being spoiled (msg 조금 쳐드렸습니다.) might spoil. For instance, hotels are constructed on the beach or in the
mountain which has a beautiful scenery. This leads to endangering destroy wildlife
habitats. Another drawback of excessive tourism development is that local
communities might lose their own cultural tradition. Many travel agents in
developing countries try to cope with the preference of travelers. As this
behavior is progressed, cultural characteristics of developing countries be
extinct in the future.
In
conclusion, it is that many developing countries regard tourism industry as an
accelerator of economic development. I believe that the development of tourism
has positive effects on developing countries in terms of economic aspect. However,
it also has negative effects on the environment of developing country at the same
time.
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