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In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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There is a claim that the way of gathering a piece of information has converted from the text to the image. I strongly agree with it. We do not find information anymore from the text because the video is a more comfortable and efficient way to gather information. Even more, The the image has become a more straightforward method for creating and sharing knowledge since the usage of the smartphone has surged, and the Internet internet speed has grown.
The image can contain much information and is easy to understand. It is no more difficult to find a person who looks for information from Youtube rather than Google (구글보단 아예 논문으로 해주시는 게 대비를 명확화할 수 있습니다.). It will be no doubt that the photograph or the video can deliver information more effectively than only a text. You (2인칭은 기본적으로 구어에 해당하기 때문에 task 2에서는 사용하지 않는다고 보시면 됩니다. 다른데에도 다 대체해주세요~) can easily understand it if you imagine the amount of information that you can acquire between TV News and Newspaper (얘네는 다 소문자 시작해주시면 됩니다.).
For the past, it was not simple to make a video or take a picture because it requires relevant devices such as the camera, or the video recorder. However, the world has changed. Nowadays, almost everyone in the world has their own its smartphone that could make those media. They do not need to write a text when they want to record something; they will do it with their device rather than write it in text.
In the era of the beginning of the Internet internet, the text was the most common medium because the Internet internet was utterly slow, and it was not enough to transport heavy data. People could not use any images or videos on the internet because it was not feasible. However, Internet internet speed has surged, and it is very enough to handle that heavy traffic for now. We do not have to wait a long time for loading a video, rather that, it will stream into your computer in real-time without any delay.
It is natural to use a more efficient way when you want to find out information. That is a reason for the medium has changed from the text to the image. Naturally, people want to a more comfortable way when they want to do something. (해당 문단의 첫 문장과 내용상 크게 차이가 없습니다.) We have to be ready for this change and adapt ourselves.
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