Your Answer ▼ Nowadays life has become becomes more complex and advanced. Most people argue that current teenagers are more stressful than the older genteration. This essay will be discuss the whether teenagers' stress is more than that of the previous before generation or not.
On the one hand, some people believe that teenagers who live in modern society have has much more stress than before. Because technolohy becomes advance has advanced more and more, thus(because 가 thus 의 역할을 합니다.) many universities and jobs require a university and job wanted higher educational level. This makes pressure for youngsters to children to gain great grades rather than enjoy their teenagers life, so most teenagers go to private educational institutes in thier free time. Even though today's activities are more various activity is more variety, Children hasn't they do not have private time for developing own hobbies hobby or skills. For example my friend is good at drawing pictures, but parents wanted to her to apply for engineer major. Because of this , she didn't have a time for studying draw skill. This is more common to current teenagers. No matter what they want to learn, they just learn about something educational for future. (내용 자체에는 크게 문제가 없는데, 위에서 너무 길어졌고, 이로 인해 이 밑의 문단이 짧아졌으므로 이걸 쓰는 시간을 대신해서 밑의 문단을 보충해주세요~)
On the other hand, there are those who argued that today's teenagers are is more wealthy than before generation the past (한국어로는 '이전 세대' 라는 말이 어느정도 자연스럽게 쓰이지만, 이걸 그대로 영작한 before generation 은 자연스럽지 않습니다.), so concerns about starve starving or poor living place does not isn't exist now. For example, the current welfare system is constructed very well, so only a few have concerned concerns about their own life. Elderly peoply say that today is very comfortable to living without any worries worried. (이 마지막 문장은 문법과 철자 표시를 해드리긴 했지만, 애초에 누가 ~~라고 했다. 라는 사실만으로는 근거 전개가 되지 않습니다. 항상 '왜' 라는 측면에서 부연설명을 해주셔야 해요.)
In my opinion, Event though, nowadays teenagers have a far less concerns than before, there are some more complex problem to teenagers . So we have to more concern to teenagers and take care of them more carefully. |