This graph shows the prediction of European entertainment industry from 2003 to 2014. As an overall trend, it is predicted that there will be a constant increase in the internet sales ,while the album sales will decrease to almost zero by 2014. In detail, the sales of album started at 2300 million in 2003, which increased by 600 million. After that , it increased to around 3000 millions in the middle of 2006, which will significantly decrease to 500 millions in 년도 and then gradually decrease to almost zero. In contrast, there have showed fluctuations in the internet sales by 2008. Since then, it will shot up to 3500 million in 년도 ,which will go up sharply to 8000 million in 2014. In conclusion, the number of internet sales will outnumber album sales' in the early(biginning) of 2009. Internet sales possibly will replace the market share of album sales so that internet sales will be a dominant way of selling in entertainment industry in
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