Cambridge 13. Writing Test 1 - [Task 2]
Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is clear that living in a country where a foreign language is spoken can be hard, because speaking a foreign language makes it harder to make (바로 앞에 있는 표현이니까 가급적이면 대체해주세요~) social interactions and this can also cause practical problems. It is important to consider possible problems that can be caused.
Firstly, it is obvious that speaking a foreign language is hard and the lack of language skills can make social interactions harder. It takes about a year to speak a foreign language fluently for an average person, which means that for a year, one would have hard time getting along with local people. This can make a person feel isolated and when it gets worse, it can lead to depression. For this reason., living in a foreign country, while speaking an unfamiliar language can cause social problems.
Moreover, speaking a foreign language can cause practical problems because it increases the chance of making mistakes when doing everyday things. For example, when starting to live living in a new country, one has to fill out several forms for the electricity, phone services, and to buy a house all in a foreign language, and if there are any mistakes, the person has to make it up with time or money. Also, there can be a problem when buying products because one has to read names and explanations of products to find the right item one needs and when a person is not used to the language, he or she could misread it and purchase wrong products. This shows that living in a foreign country can lead to unnecessary cost and practical problems.
In conclusion, is true that a situation where a person lives in a country, speaking foreign language can cause social problems, as well as practical problems because when the language spoken in the country is not familiar and the person is not fluent in the language, it is hard to interact with native people, and the person can make mistakes, causing practical problems. However, as soon as once the person gets familiar with the language, these problems can be resolved. Therefore, I believe the language problems are serious yet resolvable. (사실 여기까지는 너무 나간 겁니다. 쓴다고 해서 갑자기 7점 받을 글이 5점으로 떨어지지는 않지만, 최대한 논제가 시키는 것에만 집중하는 게 좋습니다.)
(7점대 목표이고 시험은 2주 후 입니다.감사합니다)
총평: (7/7/7/7) 7.0
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