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There are a lot of significant growths in our society especially with agriculture. But still many people around the world are struggling with hungry. This is mainly because the lack of economic power of poor countries resulting from unbalanced development. There are number of solutions which should be resolved through an advanced country’s government.
These days many people around the world are facing hunger due to the longstanding economic imbalance in the world. For example, West Africa and East Asia, well known to the public as a poor area, have never had wealth, which means that those countries have never had the capital to develop their agriculture and it has eventually led to persistent poverty. In contrast, United States and UK, well known to the public as a rich country, have always been economically rich, which means that they have plenty of capital to develop their agriculture quality, so they have been far from poverty.
There are two effective solutions to the problem of huger in a backward country. One way to tackle this is the government of developed counties taking action such as donation and job creation by factory construction in a poor countries. By doing this, a poor countries can get a labor and capital power so that they can supporting themselves in terms of agriculture. Another method of dealing with this situation is using genetically modified crops. These crops can help many people who are struggling with hunger in the short term at a small cost.
In conclusion, if the government of an advanced countries would actively supporting for a poor countries and supplying genetically modified crops, this situation can be substantially alleviated.
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