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Fixing punishments for each type of crime has been a debatable issue. On the one hand>> on one hand 혹은 on the other hand 라고 써주세요, it is argued that fixed punishments would be imperative to establish social stabilisation and security. On the other hand, taking other various factors such as a motivation for a certain crime into consideration>> 다양한 요소들이라고 언급했는데 동기부여 말고 다른 것도 언급해준다면 좋을 듯 싶습니다 should be prioritised. In this regard, this essay will briefly discuss both arguments for and against fixing punishments by outlining some of those main points.
First of all, the obvious argument in its favour is that fixing punishments would give a rise to a deterring effect on society. If there were well established >> 가운데 - 빼셔도 됩니다 regulations or laws for each type of crime, people would not be likely to commit a crime in the first place. Moreover, if people could convince a court or a jury of a reason for having committed committing a crime and possibly try to get away with what they are accused of >> 문맥에 맞지 않는 말 같습니다 말도 부드럽게 되지 않구요, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary and, thus, equity could not be achieved as a result of such subjective approaches of different courts.
Some naysayers claim that considering a motivation and a reason is an inevitable process. For instance, a person killing someone in self-defense should not be compared to a serial killer, moving targetting from one victim to the next one. Additionally, in some countries, a person being held in a circumstance such as liable for stealing food to continue his life. For instance, during a famine period, The thief will be exempted, taking into consideration of the hunger.
It is thought that a form of compromise seems to be the best solution. There have to be fixed punishments for all crimes but the circumstances and motivations for commitment should be a priority before anything to ensure justice and equity.
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