The pie graphs illustrate the changes of total school spending in every ten years decade, starting from 1981.
In 1981, it is noticeable that 40 percent of school budget was used for teachers’ salaries. The percentage of other workers’ salaries took less proportion than teachers’ which was at 28 percent. School invested 15 percent of annual spending on study academic resources as well as furniture and equipment,>> 콤마 빼주세요 respectively. School only spends 2 percent of yearly budget on insurance.
In 1991, teachers’ salaries had risen rose by 10 percent, while other workers’ salaries had decreased by 22 percent. School spends 20 percent of annual budget on purchasing resource materials>>??. However, spending on furniture and equipment had fallen fell dramatically to 5 percent of total. There was no significant changes in the section of insurance section.
In 2001, teachers’ salaries fell to 45 percent. However, there was a huge drop on other workers’ salaries. It had dropped by 7 percent. The school decided to spend less amount of money on resources. The percentage of total spending had decreased by 11 percent, whereas the school invests more money on furniture and equipment which was at 23 percent. Surprisingly, the amount of annual spending on insurance had nearly tripled nearly, compared to that in 1991.
각 문단의 첫 문장의 앞은 들여쓰기 indention 을 해야 합니다 Task1은 문단 3문단이면 됩니다 보시다시피 네 문단이라 지금 글자수가 200자가 넘어갑니다 spending은 the expenditure로도 대체가 가능합니다 혹은 the amount of budget used for ~ 식으로도 가능하겠구요 또한 모든 동사는 과거입니다 현재로 작성이 되어 있는데 고치는 것도 3인칭 단수동사를 놓치는 듯 싶어 현재로 고쳐드렸지만 사실 모두 과거로 작성되어야 하구요 단 서론 부분은 현재로 작성이 되어야 하구요 그저 사실을 말하는 것이니까요 본론 결론은 모두 과거로 작성되어야 합니다 had pp는 과거부터 과거까지 이어진 내용을 말하는데 그저 1981년이란 지표만 주어졌지 언제까지 이어진단 얘기는 없습니다 그래서 쓸 수 없구요
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Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 5
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