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Dear John,
I am very delighted that you will visit the Melbourne next month >> 문장 처음엔 목적, 소개 등이 먼저 나오는게 좋습니다 I'm writing to welcome your visitation to Melbourne next month 정도가 나을 듯 싶습니다. As you know, I and my wife my wife and I >> I는 항상 뒤에 와야 합니다 다른 사람 먼저 그 다음 본인이 나와야 합니다 영어의 규칙입니다 have been living in the city for 3 years and we have a spare room to be occupied . >> 여기서 끊어주세요 접속사로 계속 연결되는 말은 좋지 않습니다 우리나라 말로 한다면 나 여기서 3년 동안 살고 있고 우리 남는 방 있고 너가 괜찮다면 환영이야 이러면 계속 쭉쭉 늘어지는 느낌이죠 and you will be always welcomed if you are ok do not mind. Otherwise, I can book you a cheap and convenient near the city so that you feel independent a cheap, convenient room near the city for you. It is the fact that the >> 도시 이름 앞엔 the 안 붙입니다 Melbourne is the one of the best tourist spots in the world. Although you are staying here for two weeks, it is not easy for you to visit all the attractions recommended by tourist magazines or websites. However, since I have many experiences in guiding friends and relatives for tour, I know the best attractions you should not miss while travelling. As I remember so far, the places you must visit are However, this city is too huge to visit all attractions, so I recommend you some places, Great Ocean Roads, Philip islands, >> 세개 이상 나열 중 마지막 and 앞엔 콤마가 필요합니다 and Puffing Valley.
Moreover, I think you should know the Melbourne's weather even though it is summer due to the reason that it is changing very quickly and sometimes dropped from thirty to 5 degree in the evening. Therefore, you should bring your jacket in case. the weather is excessively changeable, so you should bring your jacket.
I hope you make a great plan to enjoy your trip and please let me know when you will arrive and depart your arrival and take off date so that I can meet and pick you up at the airport. I am so glad and excited to catch up with see you.
Best Regards,
Nate Kim
243단어입니다.. Task2 정도의 분량이네요 최대한 줄여드렸구요 다른 부분들 보니까 쓰지 않아도 될 부분들이 늘어져 있습니다 전 아카데믹을 공부해서 제너럴 Task1을 고치느라 좀 부족한 면도 있겠지만 방금 모범 답안들 살펴보면서 대략적이나마 잡아드렸습니다 우선 포함 사항들은 모두 들어가 테스크 부분에선 7을 드리지만 243자에 task2 도 250자 이상 쓰려면 한 시간으론 부족할 수 있습니다 다 못 쓴다면 테스크 부분에서 감점이 되구요 단어나 문법 정도에선 미미하게 틀리거나 그 수가 적어서 큰 감점은 없습니다
Task Achievement - 7 Coherence and Cohesion - 5 Lexical Resource - 6 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 6
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