▶ Your Answer : Dear Andrew
How are you these days, I hope everything is going very well.
I am writing to let you know I have some good and bad news.
First of all, Finally finally (고유명사와 같이 특별한 경우가 아닌 이상 문장 중간에 대문자가 들어가지 않습니다) I have found the new job in fabrication industry, I am not working at The the Club Hotel any more longer . Actually, I have enjoyed working at the bar, but I should have found a New new job in the fabrication industry as I graduated from school 학교졸업을 해서 일을 구해야만했다는게 무슨 의미인가요?.
I already have explained that you few weeks ago about my visa condition and also what should I should do to keep liveing in Australia, (<-콤마가 아닌 온점으로 끝내시고 새 문장 시작하세요) I did talk with my company then finally they said that they will give me a RSMS Visa. I will maintain the around of mine site ???????이해되지 않는 부분입니다. I am worried about new work environment, but on the other hand, at the same time I am looking forward to working at there too.
Second, unfortunately I have decided to leave in Mackay, I have been talking about it with my wife many times. Actually, (comma) she wanted to keep live in Mackay, but it is fart away from my workplace, there were was not any other choice to keep liveing in Mackay. However, do not be being disappointed mate, I will come to Mackay Ssometime.
Take care, I really miss you and would like to see you again very soon
Best wishes,
your good friend,
Jeremy
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