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Recently, an interest about the Olympic games is more and less decreasing ??? among people. That is why some people argue that the Olympics are not the crucial event. However, I believe that this event has incredible advantages and should remain.
To begin with, the Olympics have lots of merits to the host country when it comes to prosperity and reputation from the world. For instance, in 1988, South Korea held the Olympics and it led to dramatic economic growth to that country, contributing GDP of Korea to double in that time. As well as giving economic prosperity, it had helped to increase reputation of that the country. Before Korea held that event, all people in the world recognize that the country as a developing and still in ceasefire. Through this event, people all over the world paid attention to this country and became to know more and changed their recognition.
Nevertheless, it is apparently true that this event is less popular than before. The reason is probably the side effect of the Olympics. Basically, it costs astronomical price to hold this event to build the stadium and infrastructure. For serious example, some countries had struggled to manage the negative capital financial budget??? after that event. It is because of the impellent plan to host the Olympics. In order to prevent this side effect, the host country should make a smart plan to host the Olympics.
In conclusion, I believe that the Olympic games is are still a vital event all over the world and there is no event, like Olympic to gather all people around the world altogether at a time. In order to maintain this game popular and prosperous, the host country should design eligible 어색한 단어 선택 budget and consider 무엇을? 목적어? about the ____?____ after using of the Olympic facilities.
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