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Nowadays, overseas movies are booming in many areas rather than their local one due to the high quality which can release one’s stress. Therefore, the local film is naturally neglected from the public and faced with financial difficulty. To resolve these problems, I think that government should invent on their film market to reinforce diversity of work.
First of all, the reason of why too many people go to theater for the foreign movies is that through indirect second-hand experience they can tackle their mental problems. For example, blockbuster movies, (comma) such as James Bond cannot exist imagine in the real word. Thus, when people saw see the scene which will not be happened in their whole life they are started to fall into the movie and empathize with the character ???, even mistaking ??? as if they are the secret agent. Through this, they can escape from stressful life just a moment and it also helps from getting rid of their pressure. As a result, to earn a new experience and forget about reality more and more people are looking for the foreign movies.
On the other hand, when it comes to local movies, it tends to present quite similar appearance with our life and sometimes it brings tiresome due to the low quality of technique (너무 일반화되어 있습니다. 미국의 경우 미국의 local movie는 Hollywood movie입니다. 헐리우드 무비들도 low quality일까요?) . To tackle this difficulty, the government has to put much money on the film market by advertising the newly opened movies. By doing so, the directors become more confident to produce their movies and eventually they yield diverse kind of works which are competitive edge in the field. Thus, if the local film attracts a substantial number of viewers, (comma) it will also contribute to improvement of the nation’s culture value.
In conclusion, recently, more and more people are crowed in theater for the foreign movies. However, due to this phenomenon, for numerous film markets of local areas financial adversity is inevitable. Therefore, I believe that to enhance the revitalization of the market, the government’s aid is necessary.
SCORE: 5-
Comment: release/relieve stress 사람들이 많이 헷갈려 하는 부분입니다. relieve가 맞는 표현이며 종종 release라고 쓰기도 하나, 맞는 표현은 아닙니다. 내용이 채점하는 examiner의 관점이 아닌 한국인인 본인의 관점에서만 focus가 맞춰서 쓰인 글이네요. 다음부터는 내가 아닌 examiner가 공감할 수 있는 일반적인 사실에 대해 서술할 수 있도록 합니다. |