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Excessive use of guns by police force in some countries, (comma) such as the USA has aroused as a growing concern of increasing crime rate among mass public. Although some civilians are likely to suffer from accidental incidents by gun shots, I partially agree with the idea that being armed with guns in the police force is necessary.
To begin with, civilians who do not commit crime can easily become victims of accidents by gun shots. In the USA, police armed with guns is generally witnessed, and also accidents and death among innocent citizens by mistaken gun shots of police officers can be often seen on a daily basis (REALLY? IS THIS TRUE?). The factors caused gun shots vary from miscommunication between police and civilians to racism towards certain people. These accidents have proven that the possibility of accidents and even death among innocent citizens, threatening civilians' lives by reckless use of weapons in the police force, and in turn it deteriorates belief between the police and public.
On the other hand, safety of police can be easily placed in the greatest danger without carrying guns ??. Severe crimes, (comma) including robbery, murder and vandalism have been committed by offenders who carry fatal weapons. To effectively and safely fight against these criminals and secure polices' safety, police carrying guns at certain circumstances would be unavoidable. This means that during the execution of enforcement law, policeman are more likely to face various dangerous situations where they can be attacked or injured. Thus, police armed with guns should be allowed to protect themselves. Otherwise, detectives may confront fatal accidents or fights, which no longer guarantee not only security of police but also safety of citizens.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that a level of accidental incidents among civilians can be occurred due to misuse of police armed with guns, but to protect the police from severe, violent crime, police carrying guns should be allowed in some extent.
SCORE: 6
Comment: 말을 매끄럽게 이어주는 접속사의 사용이 잘 안되고 있습니다. 또한, on a daily basis 라는 표현을 사용하여 실수로 gunshot이 매일 일어나고 있다는 것이 사실이라면 예를 들어주는 것이 좋습니다. But is this really true?
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