▶ Your Answer : The given two charts indicate the income earned by online adverts from 1996 to 2012 and that of newspaper advertisement between 2005 and 2012.
In summary, the first graph implied the amount of income came from internet adverts showed a dramatic growth and it reached a peak in the last year 2012, while the second graph showed the value of newspaper ads significantly dropped by the end of the period the bottom.
In depth, in terms of the profits obtained by online commercial between 1996 and 2004, there was no income in the first year, but the price of earnings started to climb slightly, and when the new millennium began, it finally positioned just under 2 billion dollars. Then, the income merely dropped in 2002 but soon it moderately increased to over 2 billion dollars in 2004.
Moving to the period from 2005 to 2012, the both of the revenues in the two graphs showed the a completely reverse tendency, which presented the income of online and paper ads, at 2.8 and 10 billion dollars respectively.<(what is the tendency?) The first graph indicated a the moderate climb until 2008, but after a little dip, it reached the highest point with around 8 billion dollars, while in the second chart the figure continuously decreased and positioned at the bottom with about 5 billion dollars.
Score: 6.5 Comment: 내용 정리/grouping을 조금 더 해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 차트별로 grouping/paragraphing을 해주시고 비교를 해주시면 더 좋을 것 같습니다. 문법상 silly mistakes에 주의 해주시기를 바랍니다. Newspaper print ads revenue같은 경우는 fluctuation이 많았다고 전달을 해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 수고 하셨습니다. |