The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
The tables illustrate the percentages of British students attending a university in the UK who could speak a foreign language except English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall, the percentage of students who could speak at least one foreign language increased during the period (지워진 문장을 더 간결하게 표현하면 이렇게 됩니다.) The percentage of speaking no other language decreased, but the portion of students who could speak more than one foreign languages increased. Also, Spanish was the language, (이렇게 되면 '스페인어는 언어였다' 라는 의미가 되죠. 어린뿔님 영어 실력은 충분히 좋으시니까 아마 몰라서 틀린 건 아니고 실수하신 것 같은데, 스스로 수정하실 수 있도록 두겠습니다.) and the highest portion of students could speak it in both years.
30% of the students could speak Spanish, (밑에서 다양한 문장 관해 말씀드릴 건데, 이와 같이 자유자재로 다룰 수 있어야 합니다.) which was the highest proportion, and the rate had increased by 5 percent points by 2020. The proportion of German speaking students was the least as 10% in 2000, but the figure increased to 15% in 2010. In contrast, the percentage of students who could speak French fell from 15% to 10%, and the least portion of student spoke the language in 2010. The percentage of two more languages and another language increased by 5 percent points respectively during the period. Finally, the percentage of students who said they could speak no other language decreased by 10 percent points from 20 to 10% in 2010, which was the biggest fall out of 6 categories.
총평: (7/7/6/6) 6.5
내용 자체에는 7점 선에서 크게 문제되는 부분이 없었습니다. 그러나, 내용에 비해 어휘/문법 쪽은 너무 단조롭기 때문에 어느정도의 개선이 필요하고요. task 1에서 increase/decrease 는 정말 많이 반복될 위험이 있지만, 반대로 동의어 역시 진짜 많이 존재하는 표현이므로 잘 활용해주시고, 문장들도 the ~~of ~~ 의 구조에서 탈피할 수 있어야 합니다. 마치 마지막 문단의 첫 문장이 그랬던 것처럼요. 수고하셨습니다 :)
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