The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st Century. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary.
The two maps describe changes that took place in a town from 2000 to 2009.
Overall, the most significant features of the maps are that the place has more developed over the given period. (발전이 됐기 때문에 출제자가 귀찮음에도 불구하고 표를 굳이 두 개나 준 겁니다. 즉, 발전된 것은 당연하고 이것만 가지고는 overview 가 될 수 없어요. 대략 어떤 방향으로 발전했는지를 제시할 수 있어야 합니다.)
In detail, in the top
of woodland with a lake cut down to make the industrial complex area that
expanded in the south and the lake turn into a small pond in 2009. (여기는 댓글 주세요!) Meanwhile, the residential
area that was located under the industrial complex was vanished, due to the expansion of the industrial complex for industrial new
built. Just past the river that flows through the north to the southwest, the
residential area in the west was knocked down, in place for the downed to construction of a shopping centre. In
front of the shopping centre by 2009, a multi-screen cinema opened up in place where that there was were arts centre at the beginning of 21 century along with extend slightly.
Near to a school move to in the east and a new university was built closely. (여기도 댓글 주세요!) In
case of old town and derelict warehouses, they changed into an office and a parking
area for the employees or clients. The only part of Lakeside that did not changed
was the large residential area situated in the north.
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