소요시간 44분
시험일정 4월 18일
목표점수 7점
외부도움 없습니다.
In the modern society that we are living in, more and more people want to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation because they are not satisfied with a the company they work for and this tendency could lead to some disadvantages.
To begin with, there are many complex reasons why this tendency (핵심에 대한 꾸준한 상기가 중요합니다. 즉, 이게 무엇을 의미하는지 다시금 강조해주시면 좋아요.) in an the employment industry has recently been shown. First of all, some bad traits that workplaces have such as hierarchy among workers give rise to this phenomenon. Especially in some asian Asian companies in which there are still impacts of the confucial (유교도 하나의 고유명사이므로 대문자 시작입니다.) culture, the hierarchy is the real, causing many conflicts in workplaces. Younger or new employees who have to follow thier seniors or elder ones regardless of their own opinions can sometimes feel uncomfortable or even feel like they are ignored, which make them tired of the company-life. Furthermore, some people choose to be freelancers because of discrepancy between heavy workload and low salary. In other words, these people think that they don't (줄임말을 풀어써주세요!) need to endure all of these unfairness caused from workplaces.
However, the decision to be self-employed does not always has good aspects because it is undeniable that it has some disadvantages. Most of all, those who give up their postions in a company lose opportunities that workplaces can provider. For example, employees learn useful lessons and life skills as working in a team or a group. They can feel a sense of teamwork, learn how to build and maintain a good rapport with thier co-workers, and good communication skills through the process of cooperation in their company, which they do cannot get as a freelancer. In addition, many companies offer some benefits such as health care services or health insurance to their employees but those who choose to be self-employed miss these merits and should have to take all financial burdens related to those.
To wrap up, many people choose to become freelancers since they want a more flexible and spontaneous atmosphere of work but that decision has risks that they have to take all responsibilities on their own.
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