A
university plans to develop a new research center in your country. Some people
want to center for business research, while others want a center for research
in agriculture(farming). Which of these two kinds of research centers would you
recommend, and why?
It
has been observed that a new research center will be open in my country, Korea,
according to the plans. In accordance with this current situation, some people
argue that they need to improve the fields of farming, meanwhile others want to
a business center in the place. I opine that the former suggestion is more
persuasive in our condition. 시간 문제로 인해 서론을 훨씬 간추려주시는 게 좋습니다. 여기는 Between the two types of possible research centers that can be developed in Korea, I opine that compared to a center related to business research, one related to farming is more persuasive in our condition. 으로 간 다음에 본론으로 바로 들어가주시면 돼요. 이 구조 역시 요긴하게 써먹을 수 있으니까 익혀주세요!) The majority of farmers have difficulties because
of economic recession and severe climate, but there is no systematical
institution in our nation which can help them to prepare and restore about the
conditions unlikely the field of business. Thus, I opine that a agriculture
research center is more useful compared to business ones which are already a lot in
Korea relatively if a new research center is constructed (이 친구의 경우 현 문장의 that 뒤로 넣어주시면 됩니다.).
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총평: 모든 문단이 중요하긴 하지만, 굳이 중요도를 나누자면 서론이 가장 떨어집니다. 고로 서론에서 최대한 시간을 아낄 수 있어야 해요. 이번 유형에서는 일단 제가 예시로 하나를 보여드렸는데, 다른 유형에서도 어떡하면 서론을 간추릴 수 있을까에 대해 꼭 고민해보시고, 검사 받으세요!
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