Q11: Some people say that the extensive use of computers in schools will replace the role of teachers. To what extend do you agree or disagree? |
답안 Some people believe that computers will be able to replace the role of teachers at schools because computers are now used in school to perform many tasks that in the past teachers had to do Many people believe that computers give students more than just a lot of information. However, even Computers actually help teachers work productively in schools. In the past, teachers had to prepare their office work manually, but teachers can save more time working at schools thanks to the role of computers. Most importantly, teachers can focus on their teaching for students because computers are helpful to organize the information. For example, before computers were invented, all office work in school In conclusion, computers have a lot of benefits and effects on academic performances, but 총평: (6/7/5/6) 6.0 아마 글을 쓰면서 의식은 하셨을 것 같은데, computer/teacher 등 몇몇 핵심 표현들이 너무 자주 반복되는 상황입니다. 동의어를 이용해서 대체를 하면 가장 좋긴 한데, 마땅한 동의어가 없다고 하더라도 생략, 대명사, 아예 다른 방식의 표현 등을 통해 충분히 패러프레이징이 가능하니까 꼭 글을 다채롭게 만드는 연습을 해주세요! 수고하셨습니다 :)
|