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People have different view toward their life stages, some of them will miss the time when they attended kindergarten and some others will miss the energetic life of university. However, I am sure that everybody has experienced difficult stages in their life.
For men, personally I personally think, many males would think of their young adulthood. Firstly, it is a critical time to decide the path of thier future. Most men are responsible for the financial earning when they start organise a family. When they start working, they tend to work until their retirement age and choosing an appropriate major will be stressful action >>무슨 말인지 잘 모르겠습니다. Secondly, in Korea, it is an obligation for young men to attend the army starting at the age of twenty. Approximately, for 2 years, they need to survive from the harsh conditions and intensive trainings. It also prevents them from studying continuously and lose two years of time. Finally, seeking for a job is a priority, after graduating from university. When they miss the appropriate age for the job, they have risks resulting in unemployment.
For women, I would say middle age is the time when women feel lost. They give a birth to a child and spend an extended time with their child. Mothers' have to study about the method of educating and raising, since it will be an important period for their children. Infant care is one of the most tiring tasks that most women experience. Some females will give up their careers or have a maternal leave for her child which is a meaningful job>> 무슨 말인지 모르겠네요 but, in one point, one will start to lose self confidence and start to fear of returning to the society. Some mothers will never get another chance to start again as a business women.
In conclusion, all people all experience difficulties in their lives. They will wisely overcome this process to grow up maturely, but others will need support from others to pass through this time.
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