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Dear Sir/Madam,
I am one of your passengers in your airplane. Last Saturday , I took the aeroplane from Sydney to
Korea. when I arrived in Seoul, I made some mistakes that I forgot to bring my suitcase from the air >> 반복되길래 air라고 썼습니다.
Moreover, I knew this situation next day, so I called to your company but they did not find it yet.
So Therefore >> 문두에 so 를 쓰지 않습니다, I am writing to this latter with describe features of my suitcase to you.
Actually, my suitcase has the unique color,. Because, it looks like gold, beside a printed lion mark
and totally, length is around 120 cm. Also Moreover, it is quite important for me its inside suitcase there
are some pictures , my business partners' address with personal numbers and nearly $500.
please find my suitcase as soon as possible and you can find it easily .
Unfortunately, this Friday, I will interview with my new company's owner, with taking my suit as it.
Finally, if you find it please call me this number + 81 010-0011-9191, it is my private number.
However,I cannot >> cannot은 붙여씁니다 receive phone at 7 am to 10 am, because, at that time , I pray at church everyday.
I hope you to find my suitcase as soon as possible and please show me your power.
Sincerely yours,
Jamie.
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